Hai-Kuul – June 14, 2005

Creamy Potatoes (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Boiled and then sliced up
Cooked with chives and some cheddar
They melt in your mouth

Weddin In Jeans (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
See the good ol’ boys
Convention thrown far away
Or are they just roont?

My Secondary Workstation Can Suck My Ass if It Crashes One More Time Today (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Crashing all the time
My workstation drives me nuts
I want to kick it

Just Eat It (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Your peas just sit there
Like dejected green eyeballs
No dessert for you

Summer? (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
This onslaught of heat
Is an answer to all the
Ungrateful people

Fatty Liver (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Piled high on my plate
Sits my giant nemesis
I must eat this thing

Sacre Coeur (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Protected from all
But shown to a chosen few
A precious rhythm

Trigger Finger (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
I have you in sight
And I feel the famous itch
My finger pulls back…

Shiny (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Both eyes grow so wide
At the sight of such riches
You are a magpie

Catch it Quickly (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
It’s getting away
Don’t you dare let it escape
Last one of its kind!

But… (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
A very small word
Which can bring a screeching halt
To big ideas

Let Me Clip That For You (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
There is a small hair
Waving in an unseen breeze
Sticking out your nose

Singing In the Rain (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Glorious feeling
Very refreshing and new
Too bad you’re alone

Are You There? (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Been thinking of you
You’ve disappeared from the Earth
Or so it does seem

Ok, Ok, Ok (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Please try to calm down
Your words are all jumbled up
Like a tornado

Sometimes You’ve Got To Let Go (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Holding on too tight
Will not help someone to grow
They need no bondage

Sometimes You’ve Got To Jump (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
It’s hard to take risks
You stand to lose so much, but
Stillness breeds boredom

Twinkly Toes (Requested by TheresaWarriorPrincess)
Both your feet stand out
An application of stars
Does wonders for them

This one was requested by Eric, who had very stringent requirements for the haiku he requested. I definitely spent more time on his than on any other. I do, however, feel stung by the hint of a suggestion that the rest of them contain no real craftsmanship.

Haircut (Requested by EricLippert)
Clipped hair falls like leaves
From bittersweet Autumns past
Lost from memory

I think I’m going to call it quits at haiku for today. Tuesdays are the toughest, as my lunch is shorter (I leave work early to help out with the kid’s class at my dojo, so I don’t have a lot of time). There are still many more requests to get to, but I’ve been neglecting the other aspects of this space. I still have three Fig-tionary entries I need to write. Also, the more time I spend on my space, the less time I have to read everyone elses.

This is not intended to discourage entries, by any stretch of the imagination. Keep your requests coming. I’m just letting you know that production of the haiku you all seem to love will be slowing a little, as things are getting busy, requiring me to take shorter lunches (which is my blogging time).

I’ll get to the outstanding requests either tonight or tomorrow at lunch.

*Remember, you can submit a topic to inspire your very own Haiku Poem by clicking here. You can read about Hai-Kuul here.

6 Responses

  1. Lol- I’m very impressed that you managed to meet all of Eric’s requirements. At least in my mind you did- I guess you’ll just have to wait and see what he says! In the interest of allowing you some time for food as well as blogging at lunchtime, I shall concede victory to Lannon Sidhe. Though this won’t stop my requesting- YOU’LL NEVER STOP MY REQUESTING! Ta for now, T

  2. Perfect! Now that’s what I call a haiku! And I’m certainly not saying that your other efforts are not products of craftsmanship. I’m saying that some of them are better crafted than others. Compare, say, “Just Eat It” with “No One”. “Just Eat It” has it all — universal emotional impact, a surprising metaphor and a wry but entirely apropos punchline. One can sympathize both with the child looking with disgust at those wrinkled green eyeballs and the impatience of the parent narrator. Like all good haikus, it’s a little gem, a little bundle of emotion and experience that unfolds line by line. “No One” on the other hand really isn’t an example of the form — the “door” belongs logically and emotionally to the second line, not the third. It’s just on the third to make the syllable count work out. Same with “Stupid Ex”. The emotion is there. The wry punchline is there. But the continuation of the idea of the second line into the third is jarring. I really like “Haircut”. There’s a short story you should read by Stanislaw Lem — it’s the chapter of The Cyberiad about the poetry-writing computer that gets out of control. There’s a poem about a haircut in there — six lines, cleverly rhymed, full of tragedy and loss — which gave me the idea for this haikuul. That The Cyberiad was translated from Polish gives me great respect both for the author and Michael Kandell, the translator. Check it out!

  3. Back from the overcast skies of lovely Amsterdam only to find that the inspiration that takes me through my day will be slowly drying up! Good to know that it is not the end of creativity! I can sympathize with the lack of available time – however, I have to admit that you’ve been keeping up to the requests quite admirably! And after finally returning to the wide open spaces of this wonderful country we call Canada, I would love to request two little haikus:
    1) Pets that miss you
    2) Dutch coffeeshops

    Hope that things are going great!

  4. Hi Jorge…. Happy Say Something Nice Day. 🙂 Jorge, you’re a great person. I can say that in my “bloggers opinion” There needs to be more people like you in the world. Have a great one! Linette

  5. Remember when you used to post about the happy events of your life? Whatever happened to Jorge?

  6. all these haikus during ur lunch break?!!! crazy!!!! but cool. question: why is ur name pronounced “george” and not “hor-he?” we were just wondering….

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